Poetry Chat Thread

[the-manta]

Well, the mood passed before I finished it, but there we are, I've posted a poem. You're right actually, it is odd to read it back now I'm feeling happier (it's been an odd weekend, I'm almost glad its nearly over), I can't decide if it's more abstract than usual or if it's just rambling and pouty

[Khettienna]

If hard was grass and soft was stone,

If white was blood and red was bone.

This is gorgeous - I love the inversion of the nouns and adjectives.

Maybe it's abstract AND rambling and pouty. But all of those are perfectly valid, and somewhat expected of poets anyway. Don't worry about being judged as a person based on your poetry, it contaminates the scene.

[the-manta]

it contaminates the scene.

I love that. Glad you enjoyed the poem

[the-manta]

Beautiful Khett, very atmospheric and I don't know how I missed your last one, loved that too

[Khettienna]

Thanks, manta!

Beautiful piece, Manni. Beautiful, maddening, and sad. Loved it.

[Mannimagnus]

Thank you Khett.

It just sort of flooded out of me.

[the-manta]

Ah another lovely poem, good job lilith! It's nice to see the poetry thread picking up again

[lilith]

Thank you the-manta! I'll try again sometime

[Khettienna]

lilith, that ending was beautiful.

[lilith]

And your addition is simply lovely Khett; spot on I'd say.

[the-manta]

Yeah it was great Khett Fun but still seriously valid.

[the-manta]

More Khett poems beautifully stylistic, I like the extended metaphor a lot

[Khettienna]

I must apologize for initially missing your recent entries, lilith. I connect very personally with your piece "Words", and also cannot help but admire the precision in your wording. Your big thoughts are crystal clear in small form, and somehow without any fussy language.

Jac, I love how you've layered the speaker's immediate perceptions so heavily over the one important thing in the piece. Very clever. And welcome to the poetry thread.

More, please!

[Jac]

Thank you, Khett. I wrote that after listening to the Tool song of the same name. As for more, I have about two dozen pieces as well as many haikus. Are you sure you want more?

I liked your piece as well, but it seemed unfinished? I think you're writing about loss, but I'm not really sure. It's a good piece regardless.

[lilith]

Thank you Khett, it was you and your works which inspired me to add some of my words here.

It's a wonderful thread and I always enjoy the reads!

[Khettienna]

Awe, lilith!

The thoughts are unfinished, but the piece isn't - at least, no more so than any other piece. Not trying to be overly clever, just literally stopped thinking at that point.

I think anyone who has had a few breaks can relate to Falling Heart. It's very sweet, Jac.

Your second piece reminds me of some folks I know IRL. It is always a shame when love is wasted.

[Jac]

I have poems like that, Kett: I just stopped thinking about them and left them alone. I'm getting the feeling that you've been in a...strange relationship based on your past two works. Though I can say from experience that some poets see things through rose colored glasses.

The second piece was written for a fellow forum goer who was working on a mod and it was about two of her NPCs. I don't think she ever released the mod though.

[Khettienna]

"Strange"?

I love all the sensory detail in "Alone on a bench". Really pulls you into the moment, well done!

[Jac]

Strange as in not healthy.

Thanks. I wrote that piece about a picture I saw. I thought about posting it, maybe next time I will.

[lilith]

A wonderful and fun add DarkRider

[DarkRider]

Thank you ma'am, I'm sure there's more where that came from, just wanted to add something a little fun

[lilith]

I think he needs some adventures, it seems he's into a life of nicking now.

And since you tickled a funny bone, I've added my own lame attempt at a limerick. The title is twisted offbeat shouty humor about me and my two left feet with one snowshoe.